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[desperance]

Eww. I just wrote "He was pale, fixed, his eyes staring." Oh, please. What else about him is going to stare? I told you I was tired...

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[hamadryad11.livejournal.com]

Well, 'his eyes staring' does still make sense. You're just specifying what his eyes are doing: staring as opposed to drooping, squinting, closing, tearing, itching...

[desperance.livejournal.com]

Yeah, but it was the staring that mattered, not the condition of his eyes. Trust me, in context, it was a deeply naff line.

[hamadryad11.livejournal.com]

Ah. OK. That makes sense. Context does make a difference.